Practical

Practical: Review your blog.

I received feedback from my tutor, Aaron, and he suggested that I work on my grammatical errors and punctuation.

I also noticed a couple of errors with style and punctuation that we can work on in class.

I also noticed a couple of grammatical errors. Remember to read over your work, again and again and again.

Throughout the past six weeks, I have been proofreading my work a lot more. And therefore picking up mistakes that I usually would have missed. I have enjoyed using a blog (for the first time) for an course, as I think it shows a journey throughout the term.

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Day in the life of a 21 year-old.

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Molly Scott, full-time UNI student is slow to wake up on her days off. She has a day planned ahead of her, having lunch with a friend, studying and dinner with family.

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After driving to Rockhampton, Molly decided to get coffee from Zarraffas and have a quick look in Kmart. She says “I only ever intend on buying one thing, then I get distracted”.  After buying multiple things for her house, she went off to lunch.

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Molly met her friend for lunch at The Two Professors in Rockhampton. She said her chicken burger was fantastic.

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Heading home from Rockhampton; it takes about 20 minutes to get to Molly’s new house in The Pines, Yeppoon.

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Yeppoon’s newest estate, The Pines has built a wonderful park that kids (and adults alike) can come and kick a ball around. Molly said  “I enjoy the outdoors and living an active life”.

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Molly rides her partners bike through the estate most afternoons.

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One of the many purchases from Kmart; The Red Barron ( a kite). Molly tied the string to her handle bars and rode around the estate. She said ‘all the neighbours enjoyed seeing it, they thought it was very cool!”.

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While cooking dinner Molly noticed that the clouds cleared there was a beautiful sunset on the back patio.

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A classic Chinese card game, Mah Jong is enjoyed by her partner and mother. It was Molly’s first time playing and “it was such a different game, you can tell that most card games were derived from this”.

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Molly’s evening ritual, checking all of her social media before putting down the phone and going to sleep.

Practical – Headlines

Headlines must be “riveting, in order to capture the reader’s attention”(Whitaker, Ramsey & Smith 2012, p. 284). The original headline used was FakeComicCon Investigates Incident. It was purely factual, and not very exciting.

 

Alternative headlines for the media release story:

  • Stormtroopers vs. Wolverines leaves 2 critically injured.

    • It tells who was involved and how many were injured.
  • FakeComicCon ends in bloody tragedy.

    • This headline could offend people, however it is very catchy.
  • Four arrested at FakeComicCon.

    • Shows how many have been arrested, and where. However it doesn’t say why they were arrested.

 

References

Whitaker, W, Ramsey, J & Smith, R  2012, Media writing: Print, broadcast, and public relations, 4th edn, Routledge,  New York, NY.

Practical: FakeComicCon Investigates Incident

2 June                                                                                                   FOR IMMEDIATE RELEASE

FakeComicCon Investigates Incident

FakeComicCon is working with authorities to investigate the fight that took place at their annual event in Brisbane earlier today involving 40 people.

The fight took place in the main hall of the Brisbane Convention Centre between Storm Troopers and Wolverine cosplayers.

Starting off as a play fight between the two groups, it quickly escalated to real violence. The Wolverines were wearing real knives on their hand, causing serious damaged.

Lasting approximately 20 minutes the fight left 12 people injured, 2 critical. Eight people were taken to Royal Brisbane Hospital. Two of these people, an 18 year old male from Brisbane and a 23 year old female from Townsville are in intensive care.

Queensland Police Spokesperson, John Smith said four people have been arrested on a range of charges related to weapons and assault.

CEO FakeComicCon, Casey Smith says we are very concerned for those involved, our immediate thoughts are with those who have been injured and their families.

“ComicCon series is to give people a safe place to come, play, and meet like-minded people” he said.

“An incident such as this is not in the spirit of our event, I am very upset that this has happened.”

FakeComicCon has run for three years in Brisbane without any incidents. With more than 30,000 people attending the 2015 Brisbane event alone.

The most popular events being the autographed photo signings with international stars.

FakeComicCon will continue to work with relevant authorities to investigate this incident to ensure it is not repeated.

John Smith said “At this stage, we can’t confirm any specific details but will investigate the matter fully.”

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CEO Casey Smith is available for comment.  For further information please contact Jenna Jones, Communications Manager, FakeComicCon on 07 3001 1003.

 

 

 

 

Practical: Broadcast Script.

The following is a broadcast copy of the interview conducted in Week 4.

 

Audio 

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Here I have Molly Scott, 21 and Eilish Beck, 17. And they both agree that having a successful future is important. Presenter
Eilish said she believes that family and friends are equally important as having a successful future because “they keep me grounded and focused”. Eilish Beck Interview
When asked why having a successful future was important to Molly she said “I’m not just referring to work or money, but to having a great family and good friends”.
Eilish Beck, 17 agreed with Molly that having a successful future was important. “Family, friends, and remembering how blessed we are to live in Australia” were the top things that Eilish listed off.
After returning home from a volunteer gap-year at Camp Jubilee in Canada, 2013, 21-year-old Molly Scott said “it made me realise that I wanted to help children in need”. Molly Scott Interview
Currently in grade 12 at Heights College, Eilish prides herself on being a studious and athletic student. Participating in many extra curricular activities, she still finds time to hang out with friends and spend quality time with her sisters, and cousins. Eilish Beck interview
Molly also said “my parents have given me a lot in life, so I respect them a lot, hopefully one day I’ll be as good at parenting as they are”. Molly Scott interview
Eilish believes we are blessed to live in Australia, she said “we are so lucky to live in a country like ours, especially now with all the terrible things happening in the world”. Eilish Beck interview
It is clear that both Molly and Eilish have similar goals for a successful future, both include family and friends.  Presenter

 

 

Practical B

Who will be the audience?

The audience that I will be targeting will be Central Queensland locals that are interested in The Village Festival.  It will be a large target audience, ranging from teenagers to the older generations.

 

What might they learn about the event?

They will briefly learn about the history of the event, the main organisers and of course the main acts. They will be presented with a link to the festival website and a copy of the programme. There is also a Village Festival Facebook page that will probably be included in the article, for further evidence/information.

 

What needs to be included that will make the story interesting or have more impact?

I believe quotes from attendees or organisers will have the most impact on readers. Photos of the events will captivate the readers, and let them make a connection from the story to the actual event. Information about the performers and local food stalls will be included to give readers a sense of ‘being there’ without actually being there.

 

How will I structure the story?

I’m not 100% on how I am going to structure my story. I think I will probably start with the history of the event, then move onto what’s happening at the festival this year, then move onto what actually happened at the festival. Throughout the news report I will include quotes and photo’s.

 

Practical A: Write a Storify article based on Tweets from week four.

Using Storify for the first time was surprisingly easy. I had my doubts about it, but I think it works really well for what it is. It was clearly laid out, and connecting my Twitter with Storify was as simple as just clicking the link button.

I read over the study guide before completing the article, and paid particular attention to where it explained what redundancy was, and why to avoid it. I found the examples in the study guide really helpful.

Here is the link to my first Storify.